The Creativity Thread - Page 14

RampageSword · January 15th, 2006, 05:17 PM

@siren : This sounds like a challenge to me though! I'll try it and if I think the english version's good, I'll post it!

@Hitori : "ils jettent" is roughy meaning "they throw away"

Siren · January 15th, 2006, 05:24 PM

@Rampage: a rough word-by-word translation would be perfect for me actually, it might even help me remember my french. if you don't want to post that though you're welcome to pm me anytime.

RampageSword · January 15th, 2006, 05:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Siren

@Rampage: a rough word-by-word translation would be perfect for me actually, it might even help me remember my french. if you don't want to post that though you're welcome to pm me anytime.

Therefore , I'll pm you that word-to-word translation and I'll try and translate it in a more poetic way.

DragonLady1 · January 16th, 2006, 01:50 AM

great poem, love french poems! I used to write in french too but thats looong ago

Dark_Silence · January 16th, 2006, 05:07 AM

nyctalope? i never heard that word before

what does it mean? (lazy me, i don't wan to look it up in the dictionary)

Dark_Silence · January 16th, 2006, 05:09 AM

y'know i've never been able to write good poems in French, i always write lyrics or poems in English

RampageSword · January 16th, 2006, 05:41 AM

^a nyctalope is someone who sees better during the night than the day. Cats, for instance are nyctalopes.

Magrathean · January 16th, 2006, 06:19 PM

For spanish-speaking forum members:
http://www.freewebs.com/undocontrol/faithlesswords.html

Non-spanish-speaking forum members:
I'll translate it to english sometime in january, i figure (unless i totally forget, chances of which are reduced if someone reminds me sometime this wednesday).

Siren · January 16th, 2006, 06:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by RampageSword

Therefore , I'll pm you that word-to-word translation and I'll try and translate it in a more poetic way.

hey, thanks for the translation!

i do like your poem, it's good.

RampageSword · January 16th, 2006, 09:49 PM

@Siren : It was a pleasure

Thanks for the compliment. BTW for those who haven't realized, the linked text in my sig leads to more of my works (mainly n english). If you want to get to the list of everything I posted on the net, just click here : http://www.fictionpress.com/~nightskywatcher

@Undo : Finally you gave me a good reason to get back into my spanish. Thanks and when I'll speak the language once more, I'll give you feedback on your writing.

Magrathean · January 16th, 2006, 10:23 PM

Wow, thanks for the interest.

And when you give me feedback i'll give you feedback (sorry, i'd do it right now but i'm not really smart enough at this particular moment to interpret and analyze, if you know what i mean).

Magrathean · January 17th, 2006, 02:25 AM

Okay, english version (i can't sleep tonight, no sleepiness, so i figured i'd translate the thing):
http://www.freewebs.com/undocontrol/...swords-en.html

Siren · April 9th, 2006, 08:46 AM

Was anyone looking for this thread?

6 Stringed Fingers · April 9th, 2006, 12:25 PM

That would be Zack and me. Should we close the other threads and move them here?

marduk1507 · September 7th, 2006, 02:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by King Chaos

Oh and btw, @ Marduk, I dig those poems. Actually an immense pulse to pages. It's that one actually see's decent poetry on forums, so although I'm not big on poetry myself, seeing these were a real treat and I don't want to sound like that's just because it's novelty. I actually did really like all three poems. Sorry I'm so late in saying. I guess I just didn't catch them before this thread sank. Do treat us with more some time won't you

I was skimming my old notebooks, and found some that you might like.

Room With A View

An ordinary
Room with a view
Offers consolation
And peace

The walls breathe
Their mouths smelly
With decades of
Observation

The trees outside
Shiver fearless
Steep slopes descend
To the old town

The factory mordors
Burn in the distance
But a puzzle-piece
Of the outlook

A lifetime spent
Looking for it
A depressed soul
Found its rest

The doors shut
The music playing
The night welcomes
The armchair lover

Content within
Relaxed yet focused
Solitude soaked
Dosing

The perfect grain of sand
In the heart of a desert

The Bee-Hive

The swarm of bees
Animates the trees
Circulating force
Round the royal centre

Motionless, knowing
But still talking
A strange body-talk
Resounding in their bellies

There the wildhoney ripens
A perfect mixture of juices
Thrown up to nourish
Our greedy mouths

So near us we have it
The symbol of perfection
So similar we seem to be
Yet so far from home

We talk - all mouth
Removing our hairs
Waltzing through life
Trying to remember the steps

Nourishing the landfills
With our weekly vomit
Circulating force
French-kissing the ground

But still...
Resounding in our minds
Buzzing in our sexes
The order of life

RampageSword · October 26th, 2006, 04:46 PM

I figure I'd revive this dying thread because I had a lot of free time at work last week and I ended up making my first full song parody of DT (lyrics only of course)

There it is, I rendered Tongues a surrealist and ridiculous stream of words.

The original:

Tongues, lost in me
yours be the sharp and the vile
Glide ‘neath my skin
storm through my nerves

I bury the nomad years
hours in the earth
couldn't exorcise these searing, pecking tongues
Immune you say
yet venom strikes in strangest guises
as the viper in our eyes
Tongue, throat, tongue
slayer of the word and stealer of vision

A monumental reign of terrors
throats slit up to stain the target
We're food for the hounds of trauma,
prey to the crows of stress

No power left to retrieve my stolen language
filtered through the illiterate fingers of death

Flies
let sickness be poured
from the cupped hands of bedlam
To gather the fruits, fruits from my words

On account of their brightness
I made friends with the word and the moon
went with the tide and left for the sound
of dead instruments thrown out of tune

The red squared patterns, dragonrise and
evenclaw
decoying from pandemonic symmetry

Let ring
a dissonant note in the music of the spheres
the streak of promise in the nuclear sky
These whipping black tongues
aching to lick me back to life redefined
to inject their truths within me now

and the...yeah.

Pogs, lasting fee
Years beat a shark in one mile
Glad knee mask in
Stormtroop might serve

High berry denim made ears
Ours indie hurt
Covert exercise migs soaring, fishing pogs
Hymn under sleigh
Niet vein aims truck estrange gauges
Taz the victor inner highs
Pog, trout, pog
Slay her on the board and stiller night vision

Amon Amarth peng off beaver
Frog lit up toasting tar net
Weird foot forge hinds often raw
Play-doh deploys Hostess

No plow a theft tourist thrive maelstrom anal gauge
Phil third true dill uttered figures of debt

Miles,
Of pointless bee porn
Form the topped enough bed lamb
Together the roost of beamsword

On a count of debried Ness
High maid Fred Wayne's World under moo
When twit divid an elf on the ground
Undead excrements snowing in june

Thorough squaw hard Patton
Drag and rise that Robert Shaw
Decor yin from pan demon ink sim a tree

Lettering
Add his son ant noting Dimmu's lick off Disfear's
District off pro miss indie new Clarisse tie
Daze weeping backbones
A king tool ink Maibec to lie Fred is fine
Towing jet their routes waiting meow

MyIntended · November 9th, 2006, 01:22 PM

It was a dark and grim day. I took this picture and added txt.

[img=http://img509.imageshack.us/img509/2712/lostbeyondthepowerlinesbq2.th.gif]

Kovenant84 · November 9th, 2006, 01:32 PM

As I love Senses Tied, that's an awesome pic there. Great job.

~kov.

King Chaos · November 11th, 2006, 04:53 PM

Done a demo for the demo of my bands song Blizzard... only really did it cos the drummer doesn't get the feel right on certain parts so had to make it right for him.

www.myspace.com/snowofficial

Need to add vocals, bass and do mastering... but sounding ok so far. The last breakdown is amusing if you get that far.

King Chaos · December 20th, 2006, 03:20 PM

Random clips from a band practice.

Click the gif link in my signature if you wanna hear more. We got a proper track up and stuff.

Delirious · December 20th, 2006, 04:31 PM

can't get the myspace song to play. the page loads and all but then nothing happens, no matter how many times i press play. is it me or the page/something temporary?

King Chaos · December 20th, 2006, 04:55 PM

Myspace is just really on and off. It's working for me though, so I'm not sure. I'm uploading the final thing on to putfile anyway.

EDIt

Blizzard

Putfile - BLIZZAAARDD < stream it if you can't work out how to download from copying the link adress above.

Download link.

Taliesin · December 21st, 2006, 12:51 AM

Pretty cool video! Havent listened to the songs yet, but the clip is interesting, a few cool drum sequences, too

Dark_Silence · December 21st, 2006, 05:42 AM

sounds good!

King Chaos · January 11th, 2007, 09:01 AM

Cheers guys

Had to do an experimental creative project for uni, so using 'The Prose Edda' as an aleatoric device I created this piece of ambient piano music:

Putfile - The Ashes of Ragnarok

Mint! if I do say so myself. HAHAHA

January 15th, 2006, 05:17 PM	#326 (permalink)
RampageSword AWARE! BEWARE! WAR! Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Montreal Posts: 2,956	@siren : This sounds like a challenge to me though! I'll try it and if I think the english version's good, I'll post it! @Hitori : "ils jettent" is roughy meaning "they throw away" __________________ Morality is temporary, wisdom is permanent.

January 15th, 2006, 05:24 PM	#327 (permalink)
Siren dead to this world Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: unfortunately, still here Posts: 9,341	@Rampage: a rough word-by-word translation would be perfect for me actually, it might even help me remember my french. if you don't want to post that though you're welcome to pm me anytime. __________________ fishit

January 16th, 2006, 01:50 AM	#329 (permalink)
DragonLady1 Firesoul Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: Innsbruck/Vienna Posts: 5,077	great poem, love french poems! I used to write in french too but thats looong ago __________________ ~ Photopit.com - in the eyes of music ~ ~ Portfolio~

January 16th, 2006, 05:41 AM	#332 (permalink)
RampageSword AWARE! BEWARE! WAR! Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Montreal Posts: 2,956	^a nyctalope is someone who sees better during the night than the day. Cats, for instance are nyctalopes. __________________ Morality is temporary, wisdom is permanent.

January 16th, 2006, 06:19 PM	#333 (permalink)
Magrathean worldbuilder Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Faculty of Science Posts: 7,064	For spanish-speaking forum members: http://www.freewebs.com/undocontrol/faithlesswords.html Non-spanish-speaking forum members: I'll translate it to english sometime in january, i figure (unless i totally forget, chances of which are reduced if someone reminds me sometime this wednesday). __________________ Shattered into a million brighter stars Each flare unique and rare An end beyond compare...

January 16th, 2006, 05:07 AM	#330 (permalink)
Dark_Silence Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Germany Posts: 1,910	nyctalope? i never heard that word before what does it mean? (lazy me, i don't wan to look it up in the dictionary)

January 16th, 2006, 05:09 AM	#331 (permalink)
Dark_Silence Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Germany Posts: 1,910	y'know i've never been able to write good poems in French, i always write lyrics or poems in English

January 16th, 2006, 09:49 PM	#335 (permalink)
RampageSword AWARE! BEWARE! WAR! Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Montreal Posts: 2,956	@Siren : It was a pleasure Thanks for the compliment. BTW for those who haven't realized, the linked text in my sig leads to more of my works (mainly n english). If you want to get to the list of everything I posted on the net, just click here : http://www.fictionpress.com/~nightskywatcher @Undo : Finally you gave me a good reason to get back into my spanish. Thanks and when I'll speak the language once more, I'll give you feedback on your writing. __________________ Morality is temporary, wisdom is permanent.

January 16th, 2006, 10:23 PM	#336 (permalink)
Magrathean worldbuilder Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Faculty of Science Posts: 7,064	Wow, thanks for the interest. And when you give me feedback i'll give you feedback (sorry, i'd do it right now but i'm not really smart enough at this particular moment to interpret and analyze, if you know what i mean). __________________ Shattered into a million brighter stars Each flare unique and rare An end beyond compare...

January 17th, 2006, 02:25 AM	#337 (permalink)
Magrathean worldbuilder Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Faculty of Science Posts: 7,064	Okay, english version (i can't sleep tonight, no sleepiness, so i figured i'd translate the thing): http://www.freewebs.com/undocontrol/...swords-en.html __________________ Shattered into a million brighter stars Each flare unique and rare An end beyond compare...

April 9th, 2006, 08:46 AM	#338 (permalink)
Siren dead to this world Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: unfortunately, still here Posts: 9,341	Was anyone looking for this thread? __________________ fishit

April 9th, 2006, 12:25 PM	#339 (permalink)
6 Stringed Fingers EditablePoly 1 Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: x,y,z with u,v,w mapping Posts: 1,654	That would be Zack and me. Should we close the other threads and move them here? __________________ Ce qui relie la pénombre au sel de table et une tache à une autre tache. Allez savoir ce qui s'y cache.

October 26th, 2006, 04:46 PM	#341 (permalink)
RampageSword AWARE! BEWARE! WAR! Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Montreal Posts: 2,956	I figure I'd revive this dying thread because I had a lot of free time at work last week and I ended up making my first full song parody of DT (lyrics only of course) There it is, I rendered Tongues a surrealist and ridiculous stream of words. The original: Tongues, lost in me yours be the sharp and the vile Glide ‘neath my skin storm through my nerves I bury the nomad years hours in the earth couldn't exorcise these searing, pecking tongues Immune you say yet venom strikes in strangest guises as the viper in our eyes Tongue, throat, tongue slayer of the word and stealer of vision A monumental reign of terrors throats slit up to stain the target We're food for the hounds of trauma, prey to the crows of stress No power left to retrieve my stolen language filtered through the illiterate fingers of death Flies let sickness be poured from the cupped hands of bedlam To gather the fruits, fruits from my words On account of their brightness I made friends with the word and the moon went with the tide and left for the sound of dead instruments thrown out of tune The red squared patterns, dragonrise and evenclaw decoying from pandemonic symmetry Let ring a dissonant note in the music of the spheres the streak of promise in the nuclear sky These whipping black tongues aching to lick me back to life redefined to inject their truths within me now and the...yeah. Pogs, lasting fee Years beat a shark in one mile Glad knee mask in Stormtroop might serve High berry denim made ears Ours indie hurt Covert exercise migs soaring, fishing pogs Hymn under sleigh Niet vein aims truck estrange gauges Taz the victor inner highs Pog, trout, pog Slay her on the board and stiller night vision Amon Amarth peng off beaver Frog lit up toasting tar net Weird foot forge hinds often raw Play-doh deploys Hostess No plow a theft tourist thrive maelstrom anal gauge Phil third true dill uttered figures of debt Miles, Of pointless bee porn Form the topped enough bed lamb Together the roost of beamsword On a count of debried Ness High maid Fred Wayne's World under moo When twit divid an elf on the ground Undead excrements snowing in june Thorough squaw hard Patton Drag and rise that Robert Shaw Decor yin from pan demon ink sim a tree Lettering Add his son ant noting Dimmu's lick off Disfear's District off pro miss indie new Clarisse tie Daze weeping backbones A king tool ink Maibec to lie Fred is fine Towing jet their routes waiting meow __________________ Morality is temporary, wisdom is permanent.

November 9th, 2006, 01:22 PM	#342 (permalink)
MyIntended al cuore si comanda Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Ukiah Posts: 29	dt art It was a dark and grim day. I took this picture and added txt. [img=http://img509.imageshack.us/img509/2712/lostbeyondthepowerlinesbq2.th.gif] __________________ I cannot be half of my divinity if my soul lives with you, my god. Last edited by MyIntended : November 9th, 2006 at 01:25 PM. Reason: image wont link

November 9th, 2006, 01:32 PM	#343 (permalink)
Kovenant84 T-369 days Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: My kingdom, desolate Posts: 3,358	As I love Senses Tied, that's an awesome pic there. Great job. ~kov. __________________ Gave up my worries for one good thing. One year from now, dare I call you mine? What is wrong, not with the world, but me? http://xkcd.com/123/

November 11th, 2006, 04:53 PM	#344 (permalink)
King Chaos Pomeo Osoponeor Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Chronosynclasticinfundibulum Posts: 4,581	Done a demo for the demo of my bands song Blizzard... only really did it cos the drummer doesn't get the feel right on certain parts so had to make it right for him. www.myspace.com/snowofficial Need to add vocals, bass and do mastering... but sounding ok so far. The last breakdown is amusing if you get that far. __________________ snow vids the Final Journey of the Seer! Last edited by King Chaos : December 20th, 2006 at 04:42 PM.

December 20th, 2006, 03:20 PM	#345 (permalink)
King Chaos Pomeo Osoponeor Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Chronosynclasticinfundibulum Posts: 4,581	Random clips from a band practice. Click the gif link in my signature if you wanna hear more. We got a proper track up and stuff. __________________ snow vids the Final Journey of the Seer!

December 20th, 2006, 04:31 PM	#346 (permalink)
Delirious ensammast i sverige. Join Date: Apr 2002 Posts: 1,065	can't get the myspace song to play. the page loads and all but then nothing happens, no matter how many times i press play. is it me or the page/something temporary? __________________ just cause you feel it it doesn't mean it's there http://www.last.fm/user/PerLundgren/

December 20th, 2006, 04:55 PM	#347 (permalink)
King Chaos Pomeo Osoponeor Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Chronosynclasticinfundibulum Posts: 4,581	Myspace is just really on and off. It's working for me though, so I'm not sure. I'm uploading the final thing on to putfile anyway. EDIt Blizzard Putfile - BLIZZAAARDD < stream it if you can't work out how to download from copying the link adress above. Download link. __________________ snow vids the Final Journey of the Seer! Last edited by King Chaos : December 20th, 2006 at 05:16 PM.

December 21st, 2006, 12:51 AM	#348 (permalink)
Taliesin Immaturity Aside Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: The Kop! Posts: 6,348	Pretty cool video! Havent listened to the songs yet, but the clip is interesting, a few cool drum sequences, too __________________ En fait, je me comprends Soif de pils! A million faces, each a million lies for each and all a chrome disguise prompts for action, force reaction embody promise in a sheen so pure Against all wisdom you heed no warning your desires giving you away If I could change your mind I wouldn't save you from the path you wander In desperation dreams, any soul can set you free And I still hear you scream

December 21st, 2006, 05:42 AM	#349 (permalink)
Dark_Silence Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Germany Posts: 1,910	sounds good!

January 11th, 2007, 09:01 AM	#350 (permalink)
King Chaos Pomeo Osoponeor Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Chronosynclasticinfundibulum Posts: 4,581	Cheers guys Had to do an experimental creative project for uni, so using 'The Prose Edda' as an aleatoric device I created this piece of ambient piano music: Putfile - The Ashes of Ragnarok Mint! if I do say so myself. HAHAHA __________________ snow vids the Final Journey of the Seer!