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Discussion in 'In Flames' started by HellboundeD, Mar 30, 2004.

  1. HellboundeD

    HellboundeD Wondering Voyeur

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    my heart so cold
    my viens ache seeing as i cant turn back
    the hands of time
    The chronological Scars Reopen Blood Seeps through and
    all Sanity is lost
    Lament of my mortal soul
    malice is what defines me
    I can not see what others see
    But by the end
    Regret Regresses Into my blood
    Like a relic I'm Frozen in Time

    well guys i wanna know what u think....
     
  2. HellboundeD

    HellboundeD Wondering Voyeur

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    come one guys help me improve my lyrics writeing
     
  3. EVERLOSTINDEADETERNITY

    EVERLOSTINDEADETERNITY I hate wiener dogs. Dreadful creatures.

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    Its hard to really get a feel without hearing the music to go with it , but it seems to be a good start. Its like someone trying to tell you a joke about something that happened without being there, it sounds good and intriguing but your not sure of the context or you just needed to be there. Also do the lyrics mean something to you and are they heart felt? If you really feel it then people can tell when your playing. Hope that makes some sense if not then just keep writing.
     
  4. EVERLOSTINDEADETERNITY

    EVERLOSTINDEADETERNITY I hate wiener dogs. Dreadful creatures.

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    The relic line at the end i thought was really cool.
     
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    anonymousnick2001 World's Greatest Vocalist

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    Two words to say about that, man...
































































































    SPELL CHECK
     
  6. HellboundeD

    HellboundeD Wondering Voyeur

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    anon dont diss me :) well thx guys
     
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    anonymousnick2001 World's Greatest Vocalist

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    sorRy i Waz juss kiddin
     
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    HellboundeD Wondering Voyeur

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    InFlamesGoddess New Metal Member

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    Hellbound, I think its very good :cool:
     
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    commandante Zealot

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    I think it is short
     
  11. HellboundeD

    HellboundeD Wondering Voyeur

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    its a work in progess. My friend say its good, but how is it suppose to sound bc if some one sings it with a clean voice its gonna suck but of course y would i use a clean voice?
    Well thx alot means bunches
     

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