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High English. Help is needed!

Discussion in 'Forest Stream' started by Sonm, Jun 17, 2005.

  1. Sonm

    Sonm Curse You All Men...

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    I am not a native speaker though, but I really love english for it's simple and gracious structure. I think I can speak it rather well but that depends on what I define as "well". So far I have no problem in everyday situations as well as in telling stories about my scientific stuff. But I get stuck every time I try to get into a poetry, thus your (native speakers) help is really needed and appreciated. Russell helps me a lot with that, and I hope he will continue, that's really appreciated. But as a matter of fact I feel a bit guilty pulling his door bell every time I am in trouble. That's why I hope you won't mind helping me a bit with our lyrics, will you?

    The first pit me and my wife got trapped in was the following...

    Help us tp get out with your wise prompts, plz!

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    It's an early morning, and a mist is slowly creeping away, it's like a blanket covering the earth. The mist is slowly changing it's shape and transforms. Now what would sound better to describe this thing...

    A swirling mist
    A curling mist
    A wreathing mist

    Cheers...
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  2. Anth

    Anth Member

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    at least here
    http://lingvo.yandex.ru/en?text=curling
    it is said as curling mist...

    also - to wreathe-клубиться (о дымe)

    lets see what native speakers think :Spin:
     
  3. DeathBlade

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    A swirling mist - This is probably the most common way to say what you are trying to say. It works, but it has been used 1000 times before.

    A curling mist - For some reason I dont like this one. Seems to anti poetical. For me the word curling is an ugly word and it seems that it may not work very well in lyrics.

    A wreathing mist - Now thats interesting. At first I was like... mist doesnt wreath, but then I was like... Hmm interesting, it could be like a mist in pain, a tortured mist. It was also be thrashing about, so would be changing shape constantly... Yeah its a bit unusual but I prefer this much more then the other two. Seems to be the most poetical or something.
     
  4. Sonm

    Sonm Curse You All Men...

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    2 Anth - LINGVO SUCKS BIG FUCKING TIME. I never evr use it without a good english-english vocy.

    Cool! I just need to understand how it feels and what comes to minds when one says a wreathing mist. I know and love russian very well, but even in russian I need some time to say exactly what I need.

    For instance I can say in russian:

    A floating mist, white lambs of a mist, a swirling mist, a stalking mist (I actually like it!), a sigh of a mist, a sweet embrace of a mist, a dreaming mist, waves of mist, ghostly ships of a mist, troops of a mist etc... and many more which I can't translate...
     
  5. Sonm

    Sonm Curse You All Men...

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    I just need a verb which would mean a slow, very slow creep of a mist to make an adjective out of that...

    Bloody education pulls the pillars every time I am ensured that the roof of the knowledge is just Mr Ruggedness himself...
     
  6. AlexGuinness

    AlexGuinness The Collector

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    How about "drifting mist" (as in slowly moving in one direction), or "brooding mist" would probably be my choice...?
     
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    How 'bout:

    Serpentine
    Tortuous

    Writhing and brooding are also very good.
    Hope I've helped a bit. Good luck finding the right word Sonm!
     
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    A haunting mist.
     
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    A crawling mist...
     
  10. BrandonS

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    A fowl-smelling mist! Like the one that protrudes from my anus!
    In all seriousness, if you have a mist that rolls over the hills and transforms and such, you could call it a menacing mist (if it is moving wildly -

    the mist menacingly smears upon the earth;
    such as a brush to a canvas,
    a haunting form concealed within
    the painting of mah soul!

    I realize that's corny but I don't have much experience with writing lyrics.
     
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    May be the spreading mist?
    Or softly mist?
    Or idiom Scoth mist?
    I know many words for it in russian, but in english...

    P.S. Pomni! Shpiony povsudu!
     
  12. Sonm

    Sonm Curse You All Men...

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    I have overcome this problem... Thank you for your help guys! I think I'll be asking more:))
    Cheers!
     
  13. Jinn

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    Read Robert Frost, great poet.

    I'd also reccommend Emily Dickinson and Edgar Allen Poe. :)
     
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    swirling mist, its more understandable
     
  15. Sonm

    Sonm Curse You All Men...

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    Actually I have completely changed this... Now I realli like how it all sound...
    Thank you guys.
     
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    Lolz :Sonm: Don't be silly man, it's a pleasure to help. Feel free to email whenever if you want a second opinion :)

    :LEE:
     
  17. Sonm

    Sonm Curse You All Men...

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    2 Russell! I did!
    But got no answer :(
     
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    :eek: I never got it! Send it again! When did you send the email?

    Edit: Hey dude, I found it, did you send it to russell.garwood@gmail.com buy any chance? I never check that address, it just backs up all my emails, that is why I didn't get it! I'll have a look through everything now for you, sorry for the mix up :LEE:

    Edit2 - Reply sent :cool:
     
  19. DeathBlade

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    If you still need help feel free to also email me.
     

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