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Discussion in 'Musicians Discussion' started by waif, Oct 13, 2008.

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    Blackend New Metal Member

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    Judzfell Schadenfreude

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    Nice song, I like the technicality mixed with groove. I'll be sure to check out your myspace in a bit.
     
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    :OMG: Hey Guy's it's my first post...I saw this band called Marsrea at Club Soda...here in Montreal...and was wondering if anyone else saw them. It was a really good show.
    Check them out and tell me what you think.
    http://www.myspace.com/Marsera
    Tell me what you think...I liked it.
    Thanks.
    Cobra427sc
     
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    Dear god...what has become of my thread?
     
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    PIMP PIMP PIMP
     
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    nico007p New Metal Member

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    Please tell me what you think about it. If you don't like core genres at all, comment also !




    Thank you
     
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  10. waif

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    First one:
    The noodling at the beginning goes on awkwardly long. At about 26 seconds I expected it to go into a thrashy riff based on the melody, but it kept noodling. Once it does go heavy, I feel like you switch up sections too much. The fast thrashy riff should go on for longer (I assume this is the verse part) before going into the kinda fast groove (which I guess is a bridge or prechorus). The melodic thing that plays after that sounds like a chorus; if so, it should probably repeat at some point. The thing that comes in after the chorus (at 1:57) is excellent. I would use it for a bridge. There's another melodic bit that comes in later which I didn't really see the point of and then the outro, which is very cool.
    Not to write your songs for you, but if I had those riffs and was going to arrange them, I would chop the intro noodling down to about 30 seconds, play the fast thrashy riff for long enough for a decent verse, use the fast groovy part to lead into the chorus, repeat that whole thing, then use that awesome bridge part and then go into the outro. Just my thoughts listening to this; there's definitely a good song in there.

    With the second I would cut down on the use of blasting; it really doesn't work too well. The keyboards are excessively fruity for my taste.
    I would use the riff that comes in at 24 seconds as a verse riff with a fast thrash beat over it (rather than a blastbeat). The part that comes in at 1:10 is awesome, but I would use it as a really dramatic bridge. The part at 1:30 sounds like a chorus to me, with clean vocals. The riff at 1:55 is pretty badass for an outro of some sort. Aside from that I don't really know what to do with most of these parts.

    Structurally I really don't understand what you're doing with these; they seem to be a series of disconnected parts rather than complete songs.
     
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    nico007p New Metal Member

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    Thank you very much for taking time to listen and write about these songs.
    I agree on most of all your points and I think I'm going to rewrite the first song with new sick samples keeping in mind what you said.

    You're wright ! But I'm thinking of releasing an album with my band and this is almost the only acoustic part, so I figured out I'd make it long to calibrate.

    You can call it like that. However, my music is voluntarily not structured. It isn't organised as a continuation of choruses and verses. Breakdowns and clean vocal parts tend to replace choruses.

    I made a mistake while recording. The first time it blasts, it is normally shorter, and there is a ride bell (wich you nearly can't hear) following every snare hit. In the outro, it is really too long.
    I didn't find a better sample, but I'll find it .

    Thanks again
     
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    VivaLaMuerte Hail the stench!

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    Lost Reality Save me, my miracle

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    Transcension - Five piece metal band from Scotland. Currently lacking a guitarist but our ex-guitarist is filling in while we seek a new one. Heavily influenced by bands like Pantera, Arch Enemy, In Flames, Mercenary, etc.
     
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    Then he's not really an ex-guitarist is he?
     
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    Lost Reality Save me, my miracle

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    Well, he left the band in September so technically he is. He's just helping out now since there is a severe lack of good available guitarists in our area and he's killing time till he moves away.
     
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    http://www.last.fm/music/Only+a+Shadow+Remains
    My solo thrash metal project. I'd say skip the first track on the album "control" since it's just a slow instrumental intro, go right to track to to start listening to the actual music.
     
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    I'm liking this, but yeah definatly needs some ambient keyboard over top or something like that
     
  18. Eligos

    Eligos Problem Yet to be Solved

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    Check the link in my sig, WAIF. I need an outside opinion.

    The two tracks at the top of the playlist are the new ones.
     
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    I may not be 'WAIF' but I'm definitely 'some other guy' and here's what I think:

    The first track had some cool riffs but nothing that I really felt grabbed me. I wasn't a big fan of the drums.. and I didn't really care for the vocals. The second track was IMO a lot better.. but they didn't really feel like actual songs to me.. more like collections of riffs/ideas. Granted, you're listed as Black/Death/_Progressive_.. but I still feel like the songs should go somewhere and I didn't really see where they were going. The riff that comes in after 3-4 minutes of the second track could have been a pretty cool climax.. but I think it felt flat when it should have been epic. Maybe you should add some cheesy black metal keyboards? [or non-cheesy ones.. but I prefer ze cheeeeze]

    That being said, I think the music is really promising.. and without question something I could see myself listening to. Maybe you should book a professional studio with a producer who's used to recording metal?
     
  20. Eligos

    Eligos Problem Yet to be Solved

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    We already added synths where we thought them necessary, and the producer is experienced with metal.

    Thank you for your input. I will keep those notes in mind for future compositions.
     

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