Lyrics I'm Messing With..

[Paulie!]

"I Could Eat a Peach for Hours"

Verse: (?)
Your bitter sweet revenge is tainted by misdeeds
I consume thee by science
Trade flesh for flesh and eyes for eyes of the law
I replace you through lies

Spy through a brother and a mother of a son
Rot in the cage you lied to build
Move through men undetected by sight
Caught without knowledge of crime

Chorus: (?)
I wake from sleep, I steal your life,
I play cop as you rot with mine
Capture your glory and fame as you’re stuck
Within the face that binds

This is the first draft, I can't listen to any of the music I've written or anything just off the top of my head while I'm here at work.

Any thoughts?
-Paul

 

[ahjteam]

I play cop as you rot with mine

w00t?

 

[Paulie!]

It's a continuation of the first line.. "I steal your life, I play Cop, As you rot with Mine." I should probably change it to "And play cop..."

Waiting on someone to catch the references to the inspiration...

-P

 

[ahjteam]

...it still doesn't make any sense.

 

[Paulie!]

Mine refers to the theives life in prison, he has traded fates with the cop..

-Paul

 

[Paulie!]

I could just change it to "in my stead"... it's not like i have a rhyme scheme to uphold, haha.

Edit:
I wake from sleep; I steal your life;
I play cop as you die inside.
Fake your glory; Steal your fame;
You’re stuck behind the face that binds.

Changed it again, I used rot in the first verse, didn't like the repitition.

-Paul